Zombiewood – Science Fiction Genre Writing

This story is about how a teen saved a town from being overtaken by the dead.Welcome to zombie wood it’s a nice,peaceful the enviroment was filled with trees and big houses everywhere  were normal people live nice lives except a teen called Johnny who believed in the curse of the town about how every 300 years a moron would make the dead angry and make them rise from there graves. Everybody just laughed at him for being so galuble but one day his parents were going out for the weekend so that left home and his friends who are Thomason,Gwen,Chris and Max while at the party Johnny found a buried inscription saying about how to summon the dead all of his friend decided to play 21 everything was alright until he got dared to read the inscription. Johnnys heart was beating with fear but his friends started to call him a little baby, with out no histation and not thinking it through he read out the inscription but nothing happened he sighed. Suddenly the ground cracked open everybody stopped and started to hear unknown terrifing sounds and green lights started to appear and in that moment a hand grabbed Thomason leg and pulled him down with only the sounds of scream

.Everybody started to run and more and more zombies came out in Johnny’s head he felt like a moron and so much destruction he bought on the town.He and his friends quickly reunited and decided to escape the town but Johnny said no because he needed to stop this curse.They saw a bunch of zombies coming towards them so they started to run towards a place they could hide in,max told to go because he was going to hold the zombie back so Johnny and Gwen went to try and find a hide out but they saw a mega store so they quickly went into the store and locked it so that they could be safe.They started to wonder through the store to find any survivors but instead they found trouble but they came prepared with spades to hit them with on the way they also found a teen who told them how he and his parents were doing shopping when they were attacked by zombies but only he survived.

Gwen told him about how Johnny was the one how caused the curse to happen to the town but also that he was the one was going to stop it.They found a place were they could hide out for the night but one person had to be gaurd and of course it was Johnny everything was quiet till 1:30 am when he noticed that something was moving he thought he was just seeing things but in that moment  a zombie jumped at him and grabbed desperately he got the spade and smacked it in its face causing its head to hit the ground Johnny quickly rushed to the hideout told them what happened they thought that they should figure out how to stop the dead from rising anymore,Gwen thought that if they were coming out from the ground then they should go down there and see what there is.As they walked through the desolated and demolished town that had once been their home,they had a quick glimps of one of the arcade that they used to spend their childhood in had become a closed building that was left to rot till its last days.

They saw the place were they could stop the apocalyptic disaster which the zombies where coming out from the gloomy cave that was shining with green dark light that were like eyes, they creeped in like mice so they won’t get caught as they did they could see a shinning abnormal portal that was the gateway to the dimension of which the zombies were coming from they thought of a plan but it was risky when lighting struck they would reflect to the portal so it would cause the portal to stop.Suddenly as it happened it caused it t overload which sent a huge energy blust  which destroyed everything,as they waked up and started to walk around they noticed that the bluest had caused everything they knew was destroyed.There was only one thing they could which was rebuild the town.

The air was as a polluted factory their was no sunrise to be seen. The blast had created a part of the town to be inhabitant also the ground had becomed damaged which caused it not to be able to grow fresh plants again, the once lovely and peaceful town had becomed a dark wasteland where their was no help found. Survival was crucial people were looking for anything they could find

 


3 Comments

  1. Well done for responding to your feedback Ronaldo and creating a more focused story.

    In order to achieve your Genre Writing badge, improve this draft based on the following target:

    1) Make a real effort to avoid just saying that something happened. If you are listing events then the reader is immediately not going to be interested. Try and describe to them what is going on so they have an image of it in their head.

    I look forward to seeing the next draft.

  2. The same feedback still applies here Ronaldo if you want to get the badge.

    1) Remember to focus on setting (where the story happens) in order to give your narrative a firm foundation.

  3. Good response to feedback Ronaldo and I’ve awarded the genre writing badge for the story. In order to improve it further you need to look at your sentence and paragraph structure to see if it can better support your meaning.

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